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Posted: 8/17/2009 12:46:45 PM EDT
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Posted: 8/18/2009 3:14:41 AM EDT
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Posted: 8/18/2009 9:48:13 AM EDT
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Good read, but again with the cliff hanger!!!
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Posted: 8/18/2009 10:01:06 AM EDT
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Originally Posted By blwngazkit:
Good read, but again with the cliff hanger!!! no joke, i hope the politicians get whats coming to them before they do too much damage!! |
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Posted: 8/18/2009 10:12:09 AM EDT
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Originally Posted By blwngazkit:
Good read, but again with the cliff hanger!!! I kind of try to do every chapter that way. 
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Posted: 8/19/2009 5:50:32 AM EDT
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Next chapter starts off a little slow, but speeds up towards the end. Has a little comic relief I feel some might read and think "yeah, been there done that with my family."
And apologies in advance to any squirrels living in the areas I depict. You will understand when you read it. And didn't cliff hang end it, sort of did, but that will be revealed in the near future. |
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Posted: 8/19/2009 5:51:45 AM EDT
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Posted: 8/19/2009 3:58:30 PM EDT
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Holy sheet!
 Can't wait to see how this continues.
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Posted: 8/19/2009 4:17:05 PM EDT
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Now there's a game changer all right....
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Posted: 8/19/2009 7:07:45 PM EDT
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DDDAAAANNNNGGGG Good addto the plot there, that government will be hung for treason.
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Posted: 8/19/2009 11:25:48 PM EDT
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Wow!
Grand58742, thank you - very much. |
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Posted: 8/20/2009 10:15:42 AM EDT
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Need MOAAR!!!
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Posted: 8/20/2009 7:08:24 PM EDT
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Just started reading this the other night and just made it to here , great work , keep it up.
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Posted: 8/22/2009 7:47:38 AM EDT
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Posted: 8/22/2009 2:29:15 PM EDT
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Posted: 8/23/2009 12:13:08 AM EDT
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sweet update, sounds like an EPIC work here in the future, this, and Nightmare, I want to finish reading.
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Posted: 8/23/2009 2:10:15 PM EDT
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Thanks again , enjoying it so far .
Your up there with halffast in my book. |
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Posted: 8/23/2009 2:10:56 PM EDT
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Opps DT.
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Posted: 8/26/2009 4:53:52 PM EDT
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You have really got me Jonsin' for more!
I have been reading "Normal" in the meantime. That one rocks too! ........Mounger |
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Posted: 8/27/2009 2:10:19 PM EDT
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Sorry I haven't been keeping up as much as I would like, that four letter word again W O R K
But here is the next chapter. You asked for MOAR, you get MOAR. |
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Posted: 8/27/2009 2:10:33 PM EDT
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Posted: 8/27/2009 2:20:47 PM EDT
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Thanks ,cant wait to read it . Im working to just checking arfcom while Im waiting for a system to reboot.
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Posted: 8/27/2009 5:48:26 PM EDT
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excellent!
More please 
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Posted: 8/27/2009 6:16:00 PM EDT
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Thanks for the great reading material AND for putting out the chapters so often. (I check for new additions every day!!)
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Posted: 8/28/2009 12:21:47 PM EDT
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Posted: 8/28/2009 1:25:02 PM EDT
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I suspected kilgore and O'conner were one in the same...great chapter!
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Posted: 8/28/2009 2:01:38 PM EDT
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thanks for making my day ;-)
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Posted: 8/28/2009 2:03:25 PM EDT
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Grand! I was right a few pages ago when I thought you'd hinted at who O'Connor really was!
I'm glad I didn't post who I suspected, I would've ruined your build up to this point! |
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Posted: 8/28/2009 2:05:13 PM EDT
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Originally Posted By blwngazkit:
Grand! I was right a few pages ago when I thought you'd hinted at who O'Connor really was! I'm glad I didn't post who I suspected, I would've ruined your build up to this point! ...same here......i even posted i thought who o'conner was.... 
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Posted: 8/28/2009 2:33:58 PM EDT
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Originally Posted By blwngazkit:
Grand! I was right a few pages ago when I thought you'd hinted at who O'Connor really was! I'm glad I didn't post who I suspected, I would've ruined your build up to this point! No, not really. I tried to throw off the scent enough throughout the story when O'Connor first appeared to sew enough doubt in who he really was. Even though you thought you might have known who he was, there was probably lingering doubt in your mind if Kilgore really was O'Connor, especially with the way he acted at some points. But truth be told, Kilgore's alternate identity, O'Connor, actually was never meant to be him. As originally written out, he was just going to be a drone within the Independence Party with limited parts; mainly just doing the whole "we want that Donati guy alive to blow the top off the Administration" routine. But eventually I decided it was too good of an opportunity to wrap the two together and create the "gray man on the phone" for the story with a little darkness surrounding him. However, Kilgore/O'Connor is not even close to being done. We still have a few more scenes with him. |
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Posted: 8/28/2009 10:46:49 PM EDT
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Originally Posted By Grand58742:
Originally Posted By blwngazkit:
Grand! I was right a few pages ago when I thought you'd hinted at who O'Connor really was! I'm glad I didn't post who I suspected, I would've ruined your build up to this point! No, not really. I tried to throw off the scent enough throughout the story when O'Connor first appeared to sew enough doubt in who he really was. Even though you thought you might have known who he was, there was probably lingering doubt in your mind if Kilgore really was O'Connor, especially with the way he acted at some points. But truth be told, Kilgore's alternate identity, O'Connor, actually was never meant to be him. As originally written out, he was just going to be a drone within the Independence Party with limited parts; mainly just doing the whole "we want that Donati guy alive to blow the top off the Administration" routine. But eventually I decided it was too good of an opportunity to wrap the two together and create the "gray man on the phone" for the story with a little darkness surrounding him. However, Kilgore/O'Connor is not even close to being done. We still have a few more scenes with him. Yes, I did have my doubts, yet suspected Kilgore. Great stuff, I can't wait for more!!! |
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Posted: 8/30/2009 11:35:48 AM EDT
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Posted: 8/30/2009 12:23:27 PM EDT
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Good stuff . Thanks again
Funny I know every place mintioned in NC pretty well , my sister lives in willington , and I vacation near bear island and the Nantahala National Forest . Im plan on padding from Atlantic beach area to bear island this fall if I get some time off that I can take alone ,but my better half wants me to pull the camper to ashville area if I get some time. 
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Posted: 8/30/2009 8:37:04 PM EDT
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W.
O. W. Good read! Sad ending.... I'm thinking you killed off a particular female to help end that little moral conflict. Just a guess at who... Not gonna say here who I think, I'll wait to discuss why until you release for certain who it was. |
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Posted: 8/31/2009 12:09:29 AM EDT
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no I just realized that the guys watching the women could have gone after either one, I overlooked that part...
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Posted: 8/31/2009 7:21:59 AM EDT
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Awesome read!
I am back at it after reading "Normal". Really enjoyed that novel as well. Thanks! ...........Mounger |
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Posted: 8/31/2009 8:44:32 AM EDT
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I am pretty sure i know which one got killed off but i hope im wrong.
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Posted: 8/31/2009 12:56:55 PM EDT
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Good chapter.
I think I know as well, but we will wait until Grand tells us. Hopefully soon. |
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Posted: 8/31/2009 1:53:53 PM EDT
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Hey Grand...thanks for the inclusion of a Coastie...we get so little notice or recognition....
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Posted: 8/31/2009 11:27:42 PM EDT
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A pin could be heard dropping until the voice of Ben Murray was heard muttering “We bought some nachos?”
I completely busted out laughing and my over sized (122lb) 9 year old black lab that shakes his butt along with his tale come over to me acting like the puppy he has always been to me. This story is very good. So far Ive enjoyed almost ever line of it ( except when the woman broke my train of thought pestering me that is) I would love to have the entire story as a PDF to pass on to friends and family. Its rare a book grabs me and I cant put it down! I havent scanned on to see if the story is complete but I really hope it is!!! |
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Posted: 9/1/2009 12:55:33 AM EDT
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To comment on the content of the story... Two 500lb bombs were dropped on a barn and they were able to account for the 6 bodies inside? 7th on the designator and 8th MIA? A thousand lbs of ordinance dropped on a BARN..... and 7 bodies were identified? What did they drop on the barn 1000 lbs of sand bags?
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Posted: 9/1/2009 1:32:02 AM EDT
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Originally Posted By Badlatitude:
To comment on the content of the story... Two 500lb bombs were dropped on a barn and they were able to account for the 6 bodies inside? 7th on the designator and 8th MIA? A thousand lbs of ordinance dropped on a BARN..... and 7 bodies were identified? What did they drop on the barn 1000 lbs of sand bags? A little creative work on my part, but the human body does tend to do strange things when exposed to explosives. Some bodies don't look like they've been through an explosion, others are torn to shreds. I mean, it could have been delayed action, superquick action that went off the moment it hit the door. They could have been shielded somewhat by equipment in the barn, so on and so forth. For the intent of the story, I needed seven out of the eight to be identified, or at least accounted for, so I took the liberty of showing the best case scenario. I am glad you are enjoying the story and taking the time to point out small details like this though. I appreciate the feedback. |
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Posted: 9/2/2009 12:30:47 AM EDT
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Well I finally got finished with everything to date. Started yesterday afternoon and since I didnt have any work I pretty much read it non stop save for sleeping last night! I hoped the story was complete but didnt want to look ahead to see and spoil anything! I cant wait for more chapters!!!!!!!! Its 12:30am and im wired from drinking caffine all day and reading haha.
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Posted: 9/3/2009 1:56:58 AM EDT
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Posted: 9/3/2009 5:21:35 AM EDT
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The start is a libs wet dream!
Great story! |
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Posted: 9/3/2009 11:33:48 AM EDT
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Story keeps getting better and better!
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Posted: 9/6/2009 12:22:42 PM EDT
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ACK! Chapter 42 disappeared!
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Posted: 9/6/2009 1:05:42 PM EDT
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Originally Posted By DesignatedMarksman:
ACK! Chapter 42 disappeared! I have no idea how that happened. Might have been during the editing... Back up. |
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Posted: 9/6/2009 1:28:54 PM EDT
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Posted: 9/6/2009 3:04:01 PM EDT
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Absolutely wonderful!!!
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