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Posted: 8/7/2009 10:40:01 PM EDT
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Originally Posted By cpaspr:
Luther forgot Rule #1 when rounds are incoming through the windows: Stay below window level. I am certainly not criticizing the author or the story, but I figured a bad ass like Luther would have gone in to battle wearing body armor. Awesome story. Can't wait for more! .......Mounger |
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Posted: 8/8/2009 9:55:23 AM EDT
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Originally Posted By Mounger:
I am certainly not criticizing the author or the story, but I figured a bad ass like Luther would have gone in to battle wearing body armor. Awesome story. Can't wait for more! .......Mounger Thought of that too while writing it, but in the beginning, I was hoping to covey the image he was leading the team to believe he did not know about the team watching him from outside. |
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Posted: 8/8/2009 11:04:59 AM EDT
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Dude, stop acting like you have a normal life and post another chapter already..!!
I need my fix!! |
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Posted: 8/9/2009 10:55:23 AM EDT
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Originally Posted By Spankadin:
Dude, stop acting like you have a normal life and post another chapter already..!! I need my fix!! Thanks for the laugh. I really needed that. As requested. |
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Posted: 8/9/2009 10:55:41 AM EDT
[Last Edit: Grand58742]
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Posted: 8/9/2009 12:12:11 PM EDT
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Originally Posted By Grand58742:
Originally Posted By Spankadin:
Dude, stop acting like you have a normal life and post another chapter already..!! I need my fix!! Thanks for the laugh. I really needed that. As requested. Before I read the new chapter I just wanted to tell ya that you have a GREAT writing style and your shit is awesome!! I keep find myself wanting more everytime I end the chapter.. |
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Posted: 8/9/2009 4:11:43 PM EDT
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There is only one thing to say.
More Please. |
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Posted: 8/9/2009 8:15:43 PM EDT
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I really can't wait for the next chapter, when will it be? you are relieved of ALL DUTY to everything and everyone else until the rest of this is done, I don't care if you're sick as a dog or in bed with Sarah Palin. it needs to be UP!!!
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA...I keed, but really, great stuff, thanks for taking the time to post it. |
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Posted: 8/10/2009 11:25:38 AM EDT
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Your an awsome writer and I really enjoy your work, KEEP IT UP
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Posted: 8/10/2009 1:20:40 PM EDT
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Love the story, and your writing is improving steadily. The characters are many-dimensional and realistic. I have one nitpick though.
THEY'RE NOT SHELLS!!! GAH!!! Ok, I got that out. Thanks for the great story and I look forward to reading more. |
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Posted: 8/10/2009 1:58:28 PM EDT
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Originally Posted By Grand58742:
Originally Posted By Mounger:
I am certainly not criticizing the author or the story, but I figured a bad ass like Luther would have gone in to battle wearing body armor. Awesome story. Can't wait for more! .......Mounger Thought of that too while writing it, but in the beginning, I was hoping to covey the image he was leading the team to believe he did not know about the team watching him from outside. I can go along with that 
Thanks.........Mounger |
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Posted: 8/10/2009 3:27:58 PM EDT
[#12]
..wow...just wow.....dont let charli die.......awesome as usual Grand
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Posted: 8/10/2009 8:48:46 PM EDT
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I agree she should not die. I think she and Tony need to be together.
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Posted: 8/10/2009 10:01:09 PM EDT
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Originally Posted By Multi-G:
I agree she should not die. I think she and Tony need to be together. Tony is gonna get her and the other chick into a threesome, as part of the Novus Ordo after the idiots are kicked in the nuts and a new government is elected. |
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Posted: 8/10/2009 11:58:47 PM EDT
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"“I’m not going to leave you…neither of us are…I really do love you…more than life itself,” she struggled to say before her head fell back and she slipped into unconsciousness. "
This line opened an entire new door. Unless she is refering to Amato. |
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Posted: 8/11/2009 4:03:01 AM EDT
[Last Edit: Grand58742]
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Posted: 8/11/2009 9:03:42 AM EDT
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I friggin love it!
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Posted: 8/11/2009 9:32:15 AM EDT
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So, yes, Charli is pregnant. For those that figured it out in the hints I left here and there prior to Chapter 32, thanks for keeping it to yourself.
Tony seriously has some issues now. |
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Posted: 8/11/2009 11:12:11 AM EDT
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this may be the best novel I have read in years......and i didnt catch the hints about Charli being pregnant.....but I think I know or at least am guessing who "O'Connor" might be.....but im not sayin......lol
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Posted: 8/11/2009 12:47:53 PM EDT
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interesting, very interesting, I didn't get the hints either.
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CO, USA
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Posted: 8/11/2009 2:42:53 PM EDT
[#21]
I really wanted to spill the beans on Charli's pregnancy. It was so obvious, but I've been there and done that. :)
Great story I'm looking forward to each and every chapter! |
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Posted: 8/11/2009 2:57:37 PM EDT
[#22]
Keep it up Grand this story is great and it seems like you really enjoy writing it!
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Posted: 8/11/2009 4:17:20 PM EDT
[Last Edit: Grand58742]
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Posted: 8/11/2009 6:14:46 PM EDT
[#24]
Excellent. Can't wait for the next installment.
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Posted: 8/11/2009 9:57:37 PM EDT
[#25]
Nice. Two chapters the same day.
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Posted: 8/11/2009 11:17:38 PM EDT
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<PETER GRIFFEN> SWEEET </PETER GRIFFEN>
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Posted: 8/12/2009 9:58:00 AM EDT
[Last Edit: oulufinn]
[#27]
I am amazed at the writing talent, here on ARFCOM! Great story!
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Posted: 8/12/2009 9:59:13 AM EDT
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Great Chapter, Keep it up |
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Posted: 8/12/2009 10:18:27 PM EDT
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Must have more.
This is a great one. Loved it when the doc said "take back my country" |
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Posted: 8/13/2009 2:29:01 PM EDT
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Posted: 8/13/2009 3:49:44 PM EDT
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arggggghhhhhhhhh.......cliffhanger!!!!!!!!
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Posted: 8/13/2009 4:35:30 PM EDT
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NO!!! Argh.... I hate cliffhangers...
Great read! |
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Posted: 8/13/2009 4:50:09 PM EDT
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You have better keep this story going or Tony will find you
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Posted: 8/13/2009 5:12:44 PM EDT
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nice updates
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Posted: 8/14/2009 12:14:23 AM EDT
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I really hate cliffhangers
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Posted: 8/14/2009 10:26:15 AM EDT
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...Grand is taunting us.....he is the Debbil......
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TX, USA
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Posted: 8/14/2009 12:33:48 PM EDT
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You seriously need to get this published. This is the best story I have read in I cant remember how long.
And I have read some good ones, professionally published or not. Thanks and please more!!!! ............Mounger |
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Posted: 8/14/2009 12:39:52 PM EDT
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Originally Posted By Mounger:
You seriously need to get this published. This is the best story I have read in I cant remember how long. And I have read some good ones, professionally published or not. Thanks and please more!!!! ............Mounger see...told ya so Grand......
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Posted: 8/14/2009 2:28:50 PM EDT
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Originally Posted By polarbare:
I really hate cliffhangers Was there a cliffhanger there? I mean, I know what happens next. What makes it a cliffhanger? |
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Posted: 8/14/2009 3:05:28 PM EDT
[Last Edit: Grand58742]
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WY, USA
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Posted: 8/14/2009 3:07:14 PM EDT
[Last Edit: WDS]
[#41]
This story and your writing is awesome, would love to see this as a move or mini series and would love to see it published so you can make money off your creativity. Anxiously awaiting every installment..... WDS |
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Posted: 8/14/2009 4:17:18 PM EDT
[#42]
Grand, are you seriously hinting O'Connor is who I think you are hinting he is?
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Posted: 8/14/2009 9:15:57 PM EDT
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Originally Posted By blwngazkit:
Grand, are you seriously hinting O'Connor is who I think you are hinting he is? I've never hinted at anyone in particular that I am aware of. |
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Posted: 8/15/2009 8:14:30 AM EDT
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Ok, then I read a portion wrong.
Actually after re-reading it, the passage is actually referring to something else. Either way, if I were ever in Tony's position, I wouldn't let my guard down on O'Connor either. Anyone who uses threats to gain trust/acceptance as a first method is not someone I would do business with unless there are no other options. In Tony's situation, I would play along with O'Connor until he was no longer a necessity. I imagine this is where the story will lead anyway, but I am expecting O'Connor to be someone un-thought of. Good work! I love this story! |
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Posted: 8/16/2009 5:12:14 PM EDT
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Garand, do I need to kick your ass to get another chapter out of you?
Nah, but seriously... I want MOAAR! |
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Posted: 8/16/2009 6:50:01 PM EDT
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Now be nice. Grand gets us a chapter out better than most.
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Posted: 8/16/2009 8:27:10 PM EDT
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cool, cool, thanks for the work.
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Posted: 8/16/2009 9:00:37 PM EDT
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So where the hell is the next chapter?
Awesome work |
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Posted: 8/17/2009 12:08:15 PM EDT
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Originally Posted By cougargnw:
So where the hell is the next chapter?
Awesome work Patience, patience. As much as I would love the idea of writing full time, I do have to eat. and in order to eat, I must work. It's a drag, but ya know? The job is keeping me hopping pretty good lately but I should have something in a few days. Kind of at a crossroads in the story I'm trying to connect. |
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Posted: 8/17/2009 12:37:59 PM EDT
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We will wait.
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