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5/21/2010 8:02:57 PM EDT
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5/21/2010 8:35:47 PM EDT
[#1]
Very nice.  Please continue this story.
5/22/2010 11:04:08 PM EDT
[#2]
Nice!  A do-gooder that gets a lesson in how the world really works ...



Can hardly wait for this to develop, great start!

























In on ONE
5/24/2010 3:35:11 PM EDT
[#3]
you have my attention...
5/26/2010 6:58:43 AM EDT
[#4]
sharkman,

1) Thank You for the excellent Flip of a Coin!

2) Great start on the new story

3) Suggestion:
Is it possible to edit the OP and add chapters as they are written? I find it hard to find the next chapter in these threads when you don't check in everyday. Maybe separate each chapter with stars or something. That way the story is continuous.
5/27/2010 7:27:54 PM EDT
[#5]
Quoted:
sharkman,

1) Thank You for the excellent Flip of a Coin!

2) Great start on the new story

3) Suggestion:
Is it possible to edit the OP and add chapters as they are written? I find it hard to find the next chapter in these threads when you don't check in everyday. Maybe separate each chapter with stars or something. That way the story is continuous.



We can make this happen.  Unless there are any objectives, we'll go this route.

5/28/2010 8:06:57 PM EDT
[#6]





Quoted:





Quoted:


sharkman,





1) Thank You for the excellent Flip of a Coin!





2) Great start on the new story





3) Suggestion:


Is it possible to edit the OP and add chapters as they are written? I find it hard to find the next chapter in these threads when you don't check in everyday. Maybe separate each chapter with stars or something. That way the story is continuous.



We can make this happen.  Unless there are any objectives, we'll go this route.








When ever you post I get excited but then I see no new chapter





ETA: nvm I saw the new chapter for the other one






 
6/4/2010 5:21:09 PM EDT
[#7]
TIA
6/18/2010 8:06:04 PM EDT
[#8]
Updated on 6/18.  Update up top.
6/19/2010 9:34:23 AM EDT
[#9]
nice
6/19/2010 8:08:58 PM EDT
[#10]
Mr Niles speech sounds like it was written by these folks:
http://www.americanprogress.org/
7/27/2010 7:40:18 PM EDT
[#11]
Updated up top.  New stuff starts after the ###
8/6/2010 11:42:03 PM EDT
[#12]
Update above at the ###
8/7/2010 7:09:49 AM EDT
[#13]
WOW

excellent work! I often imagine what it must have been like at the start of the holocaust - your story captures the emotion and equivocation that must have been common to many as they got on those cattle cars...
8/7/2010 2:10:01 PM EDT
[#14]
Quoted:
WOW

excellent work! I often imagine what it must have been like at the start of the holocaust - your story captures the emotion and equivocation that must have been common to many as they got on those cattle cars...


agreed.
8/18/2010 7:20:11 PM EDT
[#15]
Update up top.  Green ###
8/19/2010 8:23:02 AM EDT
[#16]
Thank you Sharkman.
8/19/2010 10:02:00 AM EDT
[#17]
good work Sharkman
8/27/2010 5:54:42 AM EDT
[#18]
Nice so far but how about a little progress? maor please
8/27/2010 5:58:05 AM EDT
[#19]
Quoted:
Nice so far but how about a little progress? maor please


Bastage!

I was hoping for an update when I saw this on my active topics.
8/28/2010 4:49:03 PM EDT
[#20]
I'm moving right now, may so the updates take awhile.
8/29/2010 5:48:45 PM EDT
[#21]
Wow, sharkman6 you are very talented. Thank you for sharing your gift.
8/30/2010 5:16:39 PM EDT
[#22]
Quoted:
Wow, sharkman6 you are very talented. Thank you for sharing your gift.


Thanks.

Update up top.  Look for the full paragraph in green.
8/30/2010 8:48:38 PM EDT
[#23]
You have created the sensation of being trapped for me while reading.
More please . . .
8/31/2010 5:15:29 PM EDT
[#24]
Quoted:
I'm moving right now, may so the updates take awhile.


The Progressive Office of Relocation has denied your application to move, so you may continue working on your awesome story, comrade

There will be strict measures for non-compliance!
9/2/2010 8:23:21 PM EDT
[#25]
Quoted:
Quoted:
I'm moving right now, may so the updates take awhile.


The Progressive Office of Relocation has denied your application to move, so you may continue working on your awesome story, comrade

There will be strict measures for non-compliance!




Update up top.  Picks up at the red paragraph.
9/9/2010 11:43:44 AM EDT
[#26]
Update up top ###
9/9/2010 4:42:53 PM EDT
[#27]
Thanks Sharkman.
If you use a unique string as your separator, we can search on it to find the new section more easily.
Just an idea, my browser won't let me search for a color
9/15/2010 6:56:00 PM EDT
[#28]
Updated.  Picks up at  "When Boyd and his family first entered the camp,"
9/15/2010 9:18:09 PM EDT
[#29]
Shaping up very nicely!

Thank You!
9/15/2010 9:45:24 PM EDT
[#30]
Good stuff!
9/16/2010 4:08:04 AM EDT
[#31]
Quoted:
Updated.  Picks up at  "When Boyd and his family first entered the camp,"


WOW, this is getting good... but it's too short... I get so excited to read it that I'm done in 10 minutes and don't have anymore to read for 2 weeks...
9/16/2010 5:40:23 AM EDT
[#32]
DUDE!
wow, that was loaded.

Thanks for the text string to find the new content.
Man I hate waiting for this stuff
9/16/2010 5:15:57 PM EDT
[#33]
Good stuff Sharkman
9/16/2010 5:27:26 PM EDT
[#34]
must... have... more.  It's starting to get good.
9/17/2010 11:46:15 AM EDT
[#35]
I get a sick feeling every time I read parts of this story as I have 2 kids as well.  Definitely the result of some great writing.  Keep it up!
9/21/2010 7:23:31 PM EDT
[#36]
Updated.  Picks up at, "Standing outside on the concrete steps of one of the old Navy buildings,"

I'll see about getting this out faster.  It's holding me up to putting out part two of flip of the coin, which is already outlined and ready to go more or less.  I just can't start posting that until I finish with this.  Anyways, thanks for the kind comments and enjoy.

9/21/2010 8:08:34 PM EDT
[#37]
Good update, but way to short. Keep it going please.
9/23/2010 8:55:28 PM EDT
[#38]
Updated at:

"They walked around the building.  In the lead, Niles straightened his tunic one more time,"  which I highlighted in red.
9/23/2010 11:12:56 PM EDT
[#39]
Good stuff, sharkman.  Keep it coming!
9/26/2010 5:00:40 PM EDT
[#40]
Sharkman, thanks for this last update. Please keep it coming.
9/27/2010 8:33:46 PM EDT
[#41]
Quoted:
Sharkman, thanks for this last update. Please keep it coming.


Thanks for the kind words.

Update up top at: "The storm raged across the Bay Area."  

I know its a short one.
9/28/2010 8:33:56 AM EDT
[#42]
Quoted:

I know its a short one.


Yup, sure was a short one. That's ok though. As long as you keep them coming as frequently as they have been we'll let a few short ones slide by. But try to keep them to a minimum.
9/30/2010 8:44:19 PM EDT
[#43]
Quoted:
Quoted:

I know its a short one.


Yup, sure was a short one. That's ok though. As long as you keep them coming as frequently as they have been we'll let a few short ones slide by. But try to keep them to a minimum.


"Boyd half-drug his children past row after row of tents."

Another short one.
10/2/2010 10:57:47 PM EDT
[#44]
Quoted:
Quoted:
Quoted:

I know its a short one.


Yup, sure was a short one. That's ok though. As long as you keep them coming as frequently as they have been we'll let a few short ones slide by. But try to keep them to a minimum.


"Boyd half-drug his children past row after row of tents."

Another short one.


Picks up again at:

"The grate did not move.  One attempt after another"
10/3/2010 12:46:28 PM EDT
[#45]
Great stuff!

Look forward to MOAR!

.........Mounger
10/5/2010 8:14:56 PM EDT
[#46]
Update picks up at:

“You kill them,” George asked
10/6/2010 12:29:07 AM EDT
[#47]
MOAR
10/6/2010 12:57:45 AM EDT
[#48]
great stuff!
10/9/2010 7:52:53 AM EDT
[#49]
Very exciting!

Thank you and looking forward to some MOAR!

........Mounger
10/9/2010 10:57:05 AM EDT
[#50]
Well done Sharkman!
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