Posted: 9/16/2007 1:44:51 PM EDT
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hmmm....the first few sentences were good. Then you went off on a religious tilt....I thought this was about cultural diversity? Also, you should read the 1st amendment word for word. "Congress shall make no law respecting an establishment of religion, or prohibiting the free exercise thereof; or abridging the freedom of speech, or of the press; or the right of the people peaceably to assemble, and to petition the Government for a redress of grievances." I predict a D- in your future. |
Really. you could say any outlandish (ie, honest comment) stuff you want, totally non-PC, but just package it as one huge paragraph. No one will read it. Just make the opening an closing sentences sound PC, you'll get an A. |
Please read word for word. Citizens expressing their religeous belief puplicly on public property in any form is not the government establishing religeon. If I may not excercise my first ammendment rights concerning my religeous beliefs is not the government preventing the free excersise thereof? |
I pasted this text from word. I used the indents here, but they did not show up. |
No he gets an F for having no clear thesis, introduction or conclusion, it's just a rant. While this is suitable for internet forums etc, it really has no place in any academic work. Could use some proof reading for conventional things, also needs formatting, and proper citation for the article he quoted (would also be good to properly quote it). ETA: It also needs better organization, it kind of rambles along as it is. |
Big ole +1. Re-write the religious rant, a single sentence can sum up your entire rant, and use that rant to demonstate and move into more on cultural diversity |
