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You need to work on your delivery. Don't say "we tried it, and it don't work" It negative, combative, disrespectful.
Don't persist 3 times! Jesus Christ, you sound like my 3 year old.
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I tried to help find a "solution" to the problem the first time, after that I was refusing to be bullied, and treated as sub-human. Right or wrong, no one should have to be treated that way.
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Before you send the letter - that is how you need to start it. State what DIck did that you feel was inappropriate, then outline what the soecific details in the nest paragraph. If you want to give backgroiund material then go on to the story about what led up to it.
As it stands now, you don't even get to yout apparent complaint until the 9th LONG paragraph. You come off as a guy making excuses, not a competent employee concerned about customer service and workplace climate.
FIRST SENTENCE should read:
On the Nth of May, 2004, Manager DICK shouted me down in a highly unprofessional manner in front of customers (only if true) and other employees, all becuase I had tried to explain that current procedures were leading to inadequate customer service during peak demand times. Right or wrong, I feel no employee should be treated that way. [you can correct the details a bit, but your complain should be completely and succinctly stated here]
[now background]
After a typically busy morning, during which at least one customer had already complained about waiting too long, and I had hardly been able to work on tires due to the number of custoimers at the desk, DICK insisted that the proper procedure then was to call up an associate from the front end to handle the desk. In my five years here, that solution has never worked - and I tried to explain to DICK that the associate called up inevitably would need to call a tire person constantly to answer customer questions, and thus this did little to speed up turnaround times on vehicles in the bay. In addition, the asociate would then stand around doing nothing and wasting Wal-Marts time,as the actual tire emplyee inevtiably ran the desk.
He insisted that I follow his procedure anyway, and as he was walking away I said, “That’s fine, but I’m just letting you know we’ve tried it several times before, and it doesn’t work. But if that’s what you want me to do, then that’s fine.”. When I stopped, he whirled around, learned forward, pointed his finger at me and in front of fellow employees, members that were standing at the chain and walking by the shop he said “I’ve given you solution, and I don’t like your cocky attitude. You’ll do as I say, or you won’t work here!” It was at this point that I felt very intimidated and had he been within arms reach of me, I would have been extremely concerned for my physical well being. I replied to his angry threat, “whoa, whoa, whoa. Dick I’m just trying to let you know that we’ve tried this before-“ Dick loudly interrupted me, and angrily said that I had a cocky attitude and that I had better stop talking to him that way. He began to walk away again and I followed him. I asked him to wait a minute and talk to me. We were a few feet into the sales area, but we were still in full view of the previously mentioned employees. However my supervisor, Mr. D, had now clocked in and walked into the conversation.
From here, I told Dick that I did not know what was going on, but that I just wanted to talk to him and work out a solution to the problem, and that I was not trying to be cocky in any way whatsoever. Dick interrupted me again, and said in the most angry and frightening way, “NO! YOU DON’T TALK TO ME! YOU TALK TO YOUR SUPERVISOR! YOU TALK TO YOUR MANAGER! AND IF YOU HAVE TO, YOU TALK TO Manager Z! YOU USE THE CHAIN OF COMMAND, BUT YOU DON’T TALK TO ME!” I was very frightened by this outburst, and I said “I’m sorry, I’ll talk to you later.” After this I walked away.
[close out with one last paragraph, perhaps explaining how you were intimidated and why it too so long to file]
Thank the person you wrote to.
Close
All the rest of the stuff might be good for a sworn affidavit, but it is unnecessary here. Keep those noted as documentation, though.