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So i'm trying to write a book. This is suppose to be my opening chapter that draws readers in. It really doesn't have anything to do with the rest of the story but it happens in the same universe. So its just a rough draft. I would appreciate any and all feedback.
Prelude
to the
END.
I woke on my bedroom floor.
Sunlight was burning my face like an ant under a magnifying glass. I was feeling tired, hungry, and a complete mess.
To top it all off there was a bad taste in my mouth like I’d been sucking on my fingers or something. Somewhere in the back of my head I was already resigned to taking my time.
I somehow convinced myself to get off the floor and shamble to the bathroom. On the way there I felt an overly excited headache attempt to crack open my skull and make off with my brain.
This, and my damned neck felt like someone had pulled it tight and beat it with a baseball bat. I was thirsty.
Already not a great day, the lights blasted my eyes and I almost lost it again.
“Fucking lights”, I cursed as I undressed and dropped my clothes on the floor in a pile. A quick gIance at them showed they were mostly torn up and covered in something I didn’t want to think about.
“Note to self, clean up this mess and get some tylenol.” As I fumbled for my bathroom routine supplies...
You get the picture.
I felt like my eyes were covered in some sort of milky substance. Every eye movement I made was slow. It also seemed like everything was a few shades grayer. Must have been fun I thought. After turning the shower to warm I grabbed my shampoo and soap and began the cleaning procedure. It felt really nice to just relax under the warm water and go through the mechanical routine of cleaning up. I stepped out of the shower and pulled my red towel off the rack. It smelt nice and clean, just the way I like it. As I walked out of the bathroom I realized that there was another smell coming from somewhere. I smelt my breath. “Crap smells like a cat shit in my mouth”. I knew I forgot something. So after brushing my teeth and putting on a fresh set of clothes I walked into the kitchen and decided that I was going to make myself some eggs, buttered bread, and a nice fresh slab of steak. Health conscious that’s me alright. As I began to cook the eggs the smell of the steak got my attention. Damn that smells good, so I impatiently ripped off a piece and ate it. MMMM. When the eggs were done I threw the steak on the pan, but after only a few seconds I dropped it on my plate. “Shit where’s the bread, ……. Screw it” This brought a smile to my face. Damn tree huggers always pushing their whole grain bullshit diets on people. I ate my eggs and raw steak in peace. When I was done I started to hand wash the dishes, I turned the TV on to drowned out the work I was doing. The news channel was playing some story about some stupid riot that happened last night, “We have confirmed reports that the rioters seemed to have disperse after the initial attack, we are also getting the final numbers from the death toll at nearly 110 people.” The reporter kept talking about how the rioters ran away once the police started shooting and using tear gas, but by then I just tuned it out and finished drying the dishes. That’s when the flashes started, me and Mark standing with some others yelling about something stupid. Bodies everywhere waving and yelling. The feel of the heat as it built inside me like a furnace turned to 101 degrees. We were hanging out with these two chicks we had met the night before. We only went because the chicks were protesters and we thought that since we got them to follow us home once, why not try again. Then flashes of burning hot anger, red behind my eyes, a scream, the girl I was with grabbing Marks hand and biting it. “Oh shit Oh shit Oh shit, what the hell was that”, I started to freak out. I had backed away from the kitchen sink. I felt like I was lost and falling into a black abyss. My hands where shaking and my knees felt like jelly. I must have dropped to the floor. Because I had to pull my left arm from behind my back to grab ahold of my head. I heard this loud noise and it seemed to be emanating from where my hands were clamped tight. BOOM BOOM BOOM. Flashes of blood and hot body parts everywhere were playing on the inside of my skull. The banging was so loud I felt like my head would split open and my brain would jump out. BOOM BOOM BOOM. An explosion? “Police get on the ground; Police get your hands where I can see them.” That’s when they found me curled in a ball on my kitchen floor holding my head in my hands, tears running down my face, just rambling on and on “red means dead, red means dead”.