The Big Ugly: SHTF

Latest Link, On my previous PDF download the conversion had apostrophies and other items freaking out, hope this fixes it.

PDF Version-Fixed

So what story is it?

And why "adults only"?

Sorry I cannot post attachments yet, will be able to soon.

Covers real life stuff, if there was crap in the room I wanted you to smell it on the pages.

Is it written in english?

99.9% of it. You can't tell a story about Texas without some reference to Spanish in it...

If the link doesn't take you to it, let me know.

Thanks,

Requires membership to access.

Not gonna register at another site.

That one is actually a website worth registering for as far as I can tell. I downloaded "Normal" and "Tales from the Ranch" from there and loved those two books!!!

I downloaded "The Big Ugly" and converted it to .mobi via Calibre. It's in my Kindle now, and I'll post back about it as soon as I get a chance to read it.

Anglowulf: Thanks for sharing your work with us! I look forward to reading it!

survival monkey is a great site. Theres where I won my autographed copy of Lights Out.

Variable, Hulka,

Thanks for the words. SurvivalMonkey has some great stuff, but when I gotta get my weapon on its AR15.COM for sure.

When I get out of the newbie status my future stuff can be posted.

Right now I'm reading more than writing as this site has a tough but knowledgeable audience.

Funny thing is, I have met every one of the characters in the story at some point in my life... Scary.

Your feedback is very important, as I know of misspellings, grammatical and style errors. You will see this is my first one.

Thanks

Just started reading it tonight, I like it so far (25% in). :) I was growing a little concerned at the absence of a "good guy" type character, but it's worth the wait now that I know there is one. If the main character ("I") is anything like you, then we have a lot in common.LOL. I've had some real good laughs so far too! :D

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Thanks Variable,

Yeah, I suppose the " I " portions are me, I would probably be the good guy, but definitely not the hero. Can't write about myself that way for some reason. Later in the book, some reluctant heroes begin to rise to the occasion.
Forgive me for the name switches and bad grammar, I am getting better each day.

Awesome book!!! I really liked it! You guys should read this one, I really think you'll like it. :)

The "Adults Only" warning: No fears. This isn't some borderline pedophile fantasy like "Aftermath". It's just quite graphic, and covers some nastier sides of nasty people in places. It's not a pervert's porn book as some may fear from the adults only warning.

Anglowulf: Excellent job Sir. I hope to read more from you! With some minor polishing (just names and little stuff), I think this book will be well received in the prepper world.

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Thanks for the heads up on the "Adults Only" reason! Another Aftermath was what I was afraid of.

Yeah, my first worry was about that. I'm sure many others thought the same. It's a shame about "Aftermath too. If the guy (Al Steiner) would change the repugnant nature of the book, I think it would be much better received. Quite a few of my friends automatically passed on it when I warned them about it. I know they would have otherwise enjoyed the book. Knowing about the stir of consternation it caused, I wanted to help Anglowulf out by clearing up his warning for his book somewhat.



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Thanks Variable,

I am new to the forums so my thermostat is a bit off. I think the book reads much like some late night HBO, but not really worse. I realize in some households late teen kids read forums like this one, but the parents don't let them watch HBO. This is where the warning comes from. Not sure about that other book, never heard of it and it sounds like I don't want to.

Thanks for the advice guys... Your advice is already being used to clean up the first book, as well as going into the next one.

I promise I will do all the edits and grammar checks after each page this time!

Best Regards,

Anglowulf

Big Ugly in Word Format, link below. (Still editing Book 1, Book 2 is being built)
Document Hosting service link:

http://www.mediafire.com/?710jtkl3dcl3iry

Thanks for the link. I'm gonna check it out as soon as I finish reading Alas, Babylon and Dies the Fire. I've only got about 30 pages left
in Babylon, halfway through Dies the Fire. I'll convert that bad boy to pdf and throw it on my nook.

aftermath was a pretty good story. i still dont understand why everyone says its borderline pedophile material. if i remember correctly, the girl was 16 in that story, and the main character was in his 30's. while not a " typical" relationship, its far from a pedophile. 16 is the legal age in kentucky for a female, as it is in many states. both of them loved each other, and had a actual relationship in the story.....now if the girl was 12, i might understand some of the hate. as was mentioned several times in the story, " guess we will have to drop some of the old thinking, as this new world means living differently to survive.

in a shtf, end of the world scenario, it would become commonplace very quickly. there are lots of shtf stories out there, rape and murder will be the norm for awhile, and for anyone to think that much, much worse things will not occur on a hourly basis is living in a fantasy world. so why all the hate for a 16 year old girl, attaching herself to a older, warrior male, for protection, and survival?

for anyone who never read aftermath, brief summery.

1. big assed comet hits the earth, and fucks up everything and kills millions.
2. main characters family killed by sunami..... main character is in his 30's i believe.
3. main character encounters a couple teenagers, girl 16, and her younger brother 12-14 or so.
4. main character uses his skills to save kids from murder/ rape.
4. teens tag along, and he gives them weapons, teaches them military tactics, and basically teaches them to survive.
5. during their journey, looking for a safe place to live, girl and guy develop a intimate relationship.
6. safe haven is discovered..... ratio is approx, 10 women for every man. women are doing anything they can to land a man, men have it great.
7. lots of killing happens.....
8. eventually, men end up with more than one woman, 3-4 wives on average.....main character has three, and all are pregnant, ......

thats pretty much a quick summery. its a good read. i just dont get how a 16 year old girl, hooking up with a older man for safety, during a civilization ending event, equals a pedophile book which should be banned.

No worries, it ain't in my book anyway.
I think the guy's point is that with the striking of a key he could have made the "6" into an "8" and the book would have lost some customers.

Just my opinion.

read the big ugly last night. it was interesting. i will read the next one when it shows up...

Primer for book # 2

38 pages of book #2
http://www.mediafire.com/?cw54aibkxxp63ed
Part two starts on page 200

Could someone make the link hot?

Thanks for the story - starting book 2 in a bit.

Did some proofreading, but didn't start collecting things until late...


Old man Starnes had left that morning with his sons, they had to get some kin a several hours north.

well. Peter the Hermit, Christ’s Paupers, about the year 1096, they were the first wave. They did not do so well as they left too early, before they had the financial support from the Church and their backers. Women, Children, as well as Men jumped in their wagons to take back Jerusalem from the Muslims. They could not afford ship travel, so the entire trip was on foot, wagon, what ever they could get. Let’s face it, they were a mob, Rabble-Rousers. They did not have the resources to even reach the battle, forcing them to plunder and murder even the Jews along the way.”
They perished, the Muslims -Quotation marks missing…


volumes about guns he under normal circumstances, would never own - needs a comma…


a time. Done in series, ammunition supplies would be replenished as each gun they had only had one magazine. – not sure what you were trying to say


We will have no choice but to snipe at them from there and regroup. Jeff replied, “Sounds like a plan.” - missing quotation mark

It was morning, Raul woke up and rolled out of bed to do is pushups, - missing letter “h” (e.g. his pushups…)

It had green accents, a new F150 pickup, rather plain looking was sitting in front of it. – needs editing (It had green accents and a new F150 pickup, rather plain looking, was sitting in front of it.)

Later it was found that it was only enough Ammonia to fill a five gallon bucket on each occurrence, it was sent to the atmosphere at 270 psi in vapor form. – maybe add the word “although” after “that”?

“Karen, my grandson will be separated from me and you are not his kin so he will be put with piles of other kids in state care.” I have been keeping tabs on what is going on, some of those camps are killing people with sickness, rapes, murders and the like. The way I see it, a healthy person should risk making it to a lake house before surrendering themselves to those places.” - remove quotation mark in the middle of the paragraph

Frank was early, he had to be on-location by 5am, it was now 2am. - Grammar funkiness…

with his genre-consistent tats, beard and loose plaid shirt on - needs a comma after “beard”

No, no literally but it might have been - second “no” should be “not”

Here are some of your changes Polar, thanks for the feedback. Creeper also gave me some good changes for Raul earlier in the story I will apply in a few days.
I am not sure of how to make the link "hot."
If anyone can show me I will post them that way from now on.
Added about another 23 pages. My computer crashed again so I bought another. Time to start writing again.

Regards,

Anglowulf

Keep it up as it's a good read so far

Jason

A good stopping point, thanks for all the help everyone.

Regards




No additional content, just edits... Yep, I think I can make the links hot now.

Big Ugly - Word Format
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