First stab at some SHTF fiction.

Hey guys,

http://www.shteconomy.com/2010/05/14/work-of-fiction-eu-trip-part-1/

I am trying my hand at some fiction. It's my first try, so I'm greatful for any feedback. Let me know if you think I should keep going, or if it needs a bunch of changes. There are five parts so far, that is part 1.

Thanks!

Good Start keep it coming.

AKASL

LIVE FREE OR DIE

ETA: I'm in first!!

I like the journal entry style, it's definitely different beginning then normal fiction. Not to drawn out, but maybe could be a little longer in the entries, I know they're not designed to be full chapters but maybe include observations of the day,
I'll keep reading as long as you keep writing.


(yeah, I need to start writing again..)

Good start...I would go with a bit more description on his surroundings.

"truck smelled like a pig farmers shoes..."

"beautiful day...but you can see a thin layer of ash on every thing...."

You could try to open the entries with a slight weather report....balmy.....cool for the season.....hot...humid...etc.

I'd be nice to have a bit more of a background on the guy...what's he do for a living...what is his "survival" skill set..etc

For being 5 days.....a lot has happened w/o description.

I'll continue to read....will you post on this OP with up dates? When do we get parts 2 thru 5?

Don't mean to sound critical....I like it....I used to help grade papers for a creative writing class....sometimes I can't shut up

Good suggestions.

Parts 2-5 are already posted. I just hurried and set up a blog so I could post that and some of my other economy related stuff, so things are still a little rough around the edges.

If you go to the main page, SHTeconomy.com, you should see all the parts in featured section. I really don't have much put together yet, I just wanted to start fleshing out the idea as it hit me on my last business trip to the EU a couple weeks ago. I was flying home through Heathrow and they were closing down Northern UK and Ireland due to ash, I started to wonder how in the world I'd get home if a larger eruption began, so that's what prompted the thought process.

The first days are pretty much like my normal journal entries. Since I keep them mostly for myself, they are pretty slim on highlights. As things in the story get more hairy, I know that I would start writing a lot more descriptive entries.

I'm in China right now for work, so it might slow down a bit, but I'm gonna keep working on it.

Thanks!

Part 6 is up!

http://www.shteconomy.com/2010/05/19/work-of-fiction-eu-trip-part-6-day-13/

Hey everyone, sorry for the slowdown. I had to travel up to Beijing for a couple days and it was kinda busy.

Part 7 is up!
http://www.shteconomy.com/2010/05/23/work-of-fiction-eu-trip-part-6-day-13-2/

Edit: URL Fixed!

I think this link may be broken.

Keep getting the "URL is not valid and cannot be loaded"

AKASL

LIVE FREE OR DIE

Sorry about that! I think I fixed it. I'm in China for work and I have to use some tricks to get past the "Great Firewall" so it makes linking not quite so straight forward for me. For some reason, China doesn't like people looking a gun sites... wonder why?

Part 8 is up!

http://www.shteconomy.com/2010/05/24/work-of-fiction-eu-trip-part-8-day-13-3/

3/4 of her face looks cute, I'm enjoying your story. Keep it up.

Here's the regular pic. I like it!

[edit] Took down pic to save bandwidth.

just finished with part 8.

You're keeping my attention.....when's 9 coming?

Is the GF reading?...she's going to be jealous....and from the looks of it.....she's armed.

and lacking trigger discipline

Part 9 is up!

http://www.shteconomy.com/2010/05/25/work-of-fiction-eu-trip-part-9-day-14-1/

Anyone got any other feedback? Too boring? Not enough detail? Too much? Don't like journal style? Anything I shoudl be doing different? Like I said, I've never written anything other than work reports before so any feedback would be great!

Later,

I would usually prefer something other than the journal style you're writing in, but until things start getting hot and heavy, a normal writing style might drag things out. I'm enjoying it, keep 'em coming.

Part 10 is up!

http://www.shteconomy.com/2010/05/27/work-of-fiction-eu-trip-part-10-day-14-2/

Part 11 is up!

http://www.shteconomy.com/2010/05/28/work-of-fiction-eu-trip-part-11-day-14-3/

It's getting good.

Okay, I really am digging the story. Not to much detail, but enough to really get the feel of what's going on not just with the character but a few others around him and the overall situation.

If you keep writing, I'll keep reading.

Thanks for the feedback guys! Part 12 is up.

http://www.shteconomy.com/2010/05/28/work-of-fiction-eu-trip-part-12-day-14-4/

Part 13 is up. Lemme know what you think of the story so far!

http://www.shteconomy.com/2010/05/29/work-of-fiction-eu-trip-part-13-day-15-1/

Thanks!

Good story so far. Keep up the good work.

Thanks for the feedback! Part 14 is up.

http://www.shteconomy.com/2010/05/30/work-of-fiction-eu-trip-part-14-day-15-2/

Part 15 is up. Probably be a couple days before the next part as I'm flying home from China today.

http://www.shteconomy.com/2010/05/31/work-of-fiction-eu-trip-part-15-day-15-3/

Hope you had a good flight. I'm really digging this story and I like the journal/blog style. It definitely makes it more realistic. Can't wait for more updates!

Back in the good old USA!

Part 16 is up!

http://www.shteconomy.com/2010/06/02/work-of-fiction-eu-trip-part-16-day-15-4/

Part 17 is up!

http://www.shteconomy.com/2010/06/04/work-of-fiction-eu-trip-part-17-day-16-1/

Part 18 is up!

http://www.shteconomy.com/2010/06/04/work-of-fiction-eu-trip-part-18-day-16-2/

This story is starting to get really good! Keep up the great work.

Got me hooked! Keep it coming!

Yes, keep it up.

Keep it coming.

Part 19 is up! Sorry for the delay, but I been fighting off hackers. Why do some people do crap like that?

http://www.shteconomy.com/2010/06/07/work-of-fiction-eu-trip-part-19-day-16-3/

Me too! I think hackers are just building their resume so they can go to work for the anti-virus companies! Anyway great new installment.

Part 20 is up!

http://www.shteconomy.com/2010/06/08/work-of-fiction-eu-trip-part-20-day-16-4/

Great story! Now what happened to the plane?

Sorry I didn't get the next part done today. Too much work was in the way! As for the plane, it's in my outline. I just gotta get that far!

Thanks for reading!

Part 21 is up!

http://www.shteconomy.com/2010/06/10/work-of-fiction-eu-trip-part-21-day-17-1/

Still digging it.

Promise you won't just stop updating it to make us assume he got killed, arrested, or something like that! I hate those kinds of stories.

Good read.

I like the journal style.

looking forward to reading it, and i promise to read it if and when it's finished...

no offense to the OP, but i'm still wanting to know how: "zombies on the interstate", "taste of blood", "humanities end", "renaisance", "nightmare", and a number others end...

i don't really care to get to involved in another potentially great story only to be left out to dry with no ending...

K.

Loving the story and the pacing.

I also hate it when stories don't end. My dilemma is how to handle this one. Make it end at a certain point, focus on another area of the world for a while, or just keep it going as the saga continues. Like I said, it's my first try at anything like this. So, part of me is feeling like I should close the episode (not just leave it hanging) and try a different writing style. I thought journal style would be easy at first, and it started out that way, but as I add more detail, it's hard sometimes! LOL, I guess I need more practice.

But no fear, I have the outline finished for how I want this episode to wrap up. I don't plan on getting banned (looking at you from sea to shining sea! I really wanted that one to finish!), so you guys will have to bear with me as I bumble my way through how to write something entertaining.

I really do appreciate constructive comments both positive and negative. I'm an engineer, so writing a story is about as far out of my comfort zone to the creative side as I've ever pushed. I just put it on my list of things to try and that's what I'm doing. I figured I'd keep my first round as plausible as possible considering the events of today. I also wanted some family members to see how easy it would be for some event to tip things over.

Anyhow, thanks for reading!

Part 22 is up!

http://www.shteconomy.com/2010/06/10/work-of-fiction-eu-trip-part-22-day-17-2/

Just read 21 and I had been worried about traveling with all those guns! I think he handled it well. No complaints with the story, good job so far....

I think that a situation should evolve where he has to venture out to his weapon caches and get some "pay back". And, if nothing else, lets get our hero some action with the ladies! Oooh rah!

LOL!

I'll be keeping the story PG-13 (it's family friendly). Plus, this guys is a chicken with the ladies!

Part 23 is up!

http://www.shteconomy.com/2010/06/13/work-of-fiction-eu-trip-part-23-day-17-3/

Very good writing. Thanks for the entertainment.

glad you got the problem with the website fixed. It was driving me crazy.
story progressing well. I like the journal style.

More please ;-)

Part 24 is up!

http://www.shteconomy.com/2010/06/15/work-of-fiction-eu-trip-part-24-day-17-4/

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